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Thursday, March 29th, 2007
9:27 am
[rhys_wilcox]
Value Voodoo
What? No BOGOF joke?

Loved it. as per usual. I didn't think he was too casual at all. It probably works as a nice diversion for you too, keep thrashing little adventures like this out to keep your pen nib moist. Wish I could do it.

Don't have much to add in terms of the narrative as nothing seemed to jar.

But a few suggestions;

1. The retainer; really he should only have been paid a portion to take the job, the rest would come upon completion. That would also give him added incentive to see the job through.

2. A final footnote. Who was dipping in the tills? Did I miss something. Just a mention, even if Dave doesn't find out, to tie it up.

Good work that fella.
Wednesday, November 22nd, 2006
3:10 pm
[rhys_wilcox]
I'll have the first one
With the powers of time travel, the first post shall go to ME!!!!
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